Write a poem in which you focus on creating a single vivid and emotive image. Imagine
that you are writing your poem for someone who has never seen what you are
describing. Look around until you find an image that has symbolic meaning. It
may be a flower, the heat, the eyeball of the person sitting across from you, a
squirrel…whatever grabs your attention as an evocative image.
Fire:
ReplyDeleteLight silently dances
mesmerizing those who watch
but it is too hot to touch
VERY COOL, VERY CREATIVE, I LIKE IT.
DeleteGood imagery and cool topic!
DeleteI like the imagery that you use in the poem. You explain fire simply and convey the image of a flame to the reader.
DeleteI want to have a bonfire because of this poem
DeleteSpeaking of fire, have you checked out my mixtape?
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ReplyDeleteJim.
What a great coach he is.
He helps people in need.
He turns programs around.
The program was down,
But he will raise it up.
See the best program ever.
It’s on the downturn,
Until the savior comes back to help.
He will lead us the land of championships.
Jim.
By far the best topic choice ever. He will make the program back to where it used to be. Simply amazing. Go Jim
DeleteSolid piece of poetry, great inspiration and Jim is a good guy
DeleteNational championship bound. Roll Harbaugh
DeleteThis piece is very moving. I almost cried.
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Delete@mason State fan?
DeleteI like the positive energy you have towards the new beginning
@Mason Convertini
DeleteWhy haven't you accepted Jim as our leader to the national championship promise land?
Jim is dust
DeleteJim is dust
DeleteJim is dust
DeleteMason stop hating. You are just angry.
DeleteThunderstorm
ReplyDeletebeads
falling water,
flashing lines of
light
pealing
thunder,
cool drops touch
in damp air
I liked your poem because I can imagine what you are talking about. It reminds me of the poems we read yesterday.
DeleteThis poem is wet, like my jump shot. I really like the imagery you used
DeleteThe Ice Rink
ReplyDeleteThe thin cool air,
flowing
as the sounds
of sharp cuts and
sticks slapping
the tiny black object
which rings off the post
into the netting.
The whistle blows.
to start once again
Great word choice
DeleteThis poem is icy, like my mix tape
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Deleteis that what it looks like from the bench? Interesting
DeleteOn a Dock in the Moonlight
ReplyDeleteeyes shut in
confidence wind blows,
shivers.
arms extended out
waves splash; crash,
home.
good job:)
DeleteGreat job! I can really imagine what you are talking about
DeleteYour use of sensory language describes your scene well. I like that you explain the feelings behind the location in addition to what it looks like.
Deletesummer :)
DeleteSunshine
ReplyDeleteShining day and night
flashing its
rays,
Leaving us sticky in the
hot summer daze
very good. short but has good imagery. I like it
Deletemakes me want summer to come faster :)
Deletegreat word choice. sticky:) so vivid. very cool. i like it.
DeleteI liked how your poem rhymed because not many other people did that. It makes me want it to be summer.
DeleteStarry Night Sky
ReplyDeletethousands and thousands,
sparkling through the dark, lonely sky,
filling the depths with dots of light,
life begins and ends before we see it,
starry night sky.
I really like your poem because it makes me think of a night sky. I like your word choice also. Good Job!
DeleteNOTHING BETTER THAN LAYING OUTSIDE WATCHING THE STARS;)
DeleteI agree with Dara! Love the poem
DeleteA seed is planted in soil.
ReplyDeleteThe rain nourishes the bud.
It grows tall from its root,
But when the vitality runs out,
It will decay and a new flower will grow.
good imagery, I can see flowers growing :)
DeleteI like your theme of the cycle of a flower growing. Good Job!
DeleteThis is not only about a flower, this poem can be a metaphor for a child growing up
DeleteThe Diamond
ReplyDeleteThe warm sun
shines,
as the bat
cracks, the ball
flys,
it's going and going
it's gone,
a homerun
the game is done
$wag
DeleteSummer
ReplyDeleteWarm sun rays
shine down on me
no school in sight,
no stress of mind,
only good times to come,
If only it would never end.
11 more days buddy!! Can't wait:)
DeleteThe topic is a prime choice. Good work today kid
DeleteThis poem is sunny and lights up my day, like your smile ;)
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ReplyDeleteBall Is Life
ReplyDeleteThe ball darts around the court.
Hazy sound of the crowd stops.
The taste of dry air encumbers the stadium.
Ball slips off his fingers.
The aroma of burnt popcorn fills the air.
The attendant at the stand checks if the shot is in.
The ball makes a swoosh
crowd goes wild.
I love how this relates to your life so accurately
DeleteYes Conner, ball truly is life.
Deletewere you watching me ball
Deletelife is ball
DeleteIt is nice of you to write about me.
DeleteSleep keeps the
ReplyDeleteworld going
Sleep rejuvenates
sleep energizes
Sleep looks like peace
and has no scent
Sleep gives you energy
for Friday morning
Sleep sounds of snoring
i need sleep.
I would love to be asleep right now... ZZzzz
DeleteMy favorite topic
Delete"I need sleep" such a powerful line. you're a lyrical genius.
DeleteReally like your description of sleep. This topic can relate to everyone.
DeleteA cool breeze
ReplyDeleteBlowing around
No set path to follow
Free as can be
How great it would be
To be like that breeze
With complete freedom
To go as you please
I enjoyed your poem and found your serious tone to be thought provoking. I also enjoyed the way you structured your poem and left it open for interpretation. This made it both interesting and thoughtful.
DeleteI enjoy that your poem is not straight forward like most of these. Your poem allows the reader to let their mind wander. The allowance of freedom is what I am getting out of this poem.
DeleteUmbrellas unfold as the rain falls
ReplyDeleteIt protects us from the wet and cold
When the rain stops the umbrella's
close and the sun shines
We all hope that the umbrella
Can protect us from more than the rain
But only we can determine that.
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DeleteThis really spoke to me on a deep level because like wow, so true, we want umbrellas to protect us from more than just rain. You are true poet, Lilli:-)
DeleteVery cool, very swag, i like it
DeleteI like your topic ;)
DeleteYour poem is well written because it has a deeper meaning that speaks about things that protect us that we do not see until we need them.
DeleteBlurred blue
ReplyDeleteSurrounds the soul
Only hearing the heartbeat
And feeling the storm
I feel like this is about lakes ish??? v good. short sweet and sassy
Deletemakes me think of watching a storm on a lake :)
DeleteLife is a free verse
ReplyDeleteNo rhyme to follow
No instructions to guide it
You only live it once
It is a unique gift
It is spectacular
I like your use of YOLO, this poem is swaggy, just like you
DeleteInspirational
DeleteI believe that Jim lives his life like this. He lives it to the fullest only getting Ws. Good poem. Go Jim.
Deletecool
Deletecool
DeleteThe slight breeze,
ReplyDeletethe blooming flowers,
the warm sun,
the grass turning greener and greener as days go by,
summer is coming
The hot sand,
the smell of bonfires,
the late nights,
the feeling of jumping in the cool lake after a long, hot day,
summer is here
Great topic choice!
Deletegreat poem. Really shows what summer is all about
Deletevoory good kooly
DeleteA single cake sitting
ReplyDeleteNothing around, no noise
Light, delicate, moist
Thickly drenched frosting
Sugary, sweet
smooth, simple
Cake
This poem is yummy, like you ;)
DeleteGreat descriptive words, creates a vivid image of cake.
DeleteI like the descriptive language that you used.
Delete"moist" makes me sick
DeleteMoist like my jump shot
DeleteThe city looks so inviting
ReplyDeletewith its tall and large buildings.
The city looks so busy
with traffic and talking.
The city looks so exciting
with endless opportunities.